Lucy and John Mallory Square sunset |
LUCY BURDETTE: I am feeling my way through the 15th Key West mystery, hoping to scribble most of the story on the pages before we drive north for the summer. As always, there have been distractions. Two weeks ago, we had our kids and grandkids visiting—there wasn't much work getting done! But even when not actually writing, I’m always watching and listening, looking for interesting bits of real life to weave into my books. One night we planned to have dinner near Mallory Square at sunset, where the inciting event of the 15th book, an explosion on a boat, occurs. I took my granddaughter Thea over to see the square while we were waiting for our food. One of the acrobat/performers was there and I introduced him to Thea. Later, he chose her to help him with his act—and that became a snippet of the background in this chapter.
In the scene below, Hayley and her mother return to Mallory Square the day after the explosion, trying to figure out what happened. It's important because not only were they on the ill-fated boat, but they’d also hoped the cruise would bring a boost to their reputations and business. Worst of all, they’ve also just learned that someone on that boat died. They visit their friend, Lorenzo, the tarot card reader, but also talk with a pair of acrobat/jugglers who had been performing that night.
Tobin and his partner, David, wearing their trademark bright red pants, black shirts, and black shoes, were finishing up their performance. This time they’d included a little girl in pink leggings and a blue shirt with hearts—she stood in the center of the ring holding up giant knives, while the crowd around her chanted “Thea, Thea, Thea!” When he was finished, Tobin thanked her for her assistance and tucked a ten-dollar bill into her fist. Then he thanked the spectators and encouraged them to drop tips into a glass jar. He was drenched with sweat, and looked tired but wound up, too. He was much like Lorenzo in that his work took a lot of concentration and energy, though Lorenzo’s was more mental and Tobin’s physical.
We waited to approach him until the last of his admirers—the smiling girl who was now holding her father’s hand—moved away. I introduced my mother and explained that we had been on the boat that had blown up the night before.
The cheery smile fell from his face. “Sorry to hear that, hope you’re okay.”
“Pretty much, just a few post-calamity jitters.” We all laughed, a bit hysterically in my case. “I know it’s unlikely, because you were working hard, but I wondered if you might have seen anything unexpected in the water or on a nearby boat before the fire started and all those emergency vehicles arrived? Apparently, the police haven’t yet come to a conclusion about what caused the accident.” If it was one, I thought but did not say.
Tobin absorbed my question carefully, rasping his knuckles over the stubble on his chin. This made me wonder whether he had pre-game rituals, such as eating certain food or not shaving until after a performance, like some professional athletes did.
“You’ve probably reviewed all of this with the authorities,” my mother added, “but might it be helpful to talk about what you noticed before the incident occurred?”
He nodded at her. “We were in the middle of one of our shows when all the shouting started and we the heard the boom. A precarious point,” he added, with a small grin, “because I remember bobbling a little on the ladder. I was upside down at that moment, balanced on my partner’s shoulders. Everything looks different from that perspective.”
“Can’t imagine,” my mother murmured, nodding with encouragement.
“Nothing out of the ordinary sticks out that I can think of. It was a pretty good crowd for this time of year. And we’d snagged the cutest kid to help with our act. That always helps with tips.” He winked. “It looked like smooth sailing on the Gulf; I saw nothing that would have caused me to predict trouble. Oh.” He stopped for a minute and rubbed his chin again.
“It’s possible someone dropped off the edge of that boat and swam to a nearby dinghy. It didn’t register at the time, and maybe I’m making the whole thing up, but it’s possible that it happened this way.”
So that’s tiniest bit of real life worked into the story—it amuses me and I hope it amuses the folks I include as well. Have you noticed real life details in the fiction you read?
That's pretty great, Lucy, that your granddaughter got to help out with the show [and so into the book as well] . . . loved the little video clip. Thanks for sharing this little snippet with us . . . I'm looking forward to seeing how it all works out.
ReplyDeleteIt's fun seeing real life details in the story . . . I love how these little bits get woven into the telling of the tale . . . .
thanks Joan!
DeleteSounds good!
ReplyDeleteI actually had a favorite local pizza place pop up in the book I finished earlier this week. It was so cool to see it.
that's fun Mark--I hope they ordered what you would order!
DeleteNo, they ordered a veggie pizza. I usually go with the combo.
DeleteLove that your granddaughter was part of the act. Love the snippet shared.
ReplyDeletethanks Dru! She was very excited about Tobin's act:)
DeleteGreat snippet, Lucy! When I learned that Amelia Earhart had English to factory workers in my town before she got famous, and then worked in Boston, I knew I had to write a book about her!
ReplyDeleteThe story was meant for you Edith:)
DeleteGreat scene. How nice that your granddaughter was able to participate. (I enjoyed the clip.) I like it that you include real people in your scenes.
ReplyDeleteShe had a blast, thanks!
DeleteIt's so much fun for us to watch our kids and then our grandkids having fun. That was a big crowd! What did Thea say afterwards? Was she still excited the next day?
ReplyDeleteThe snippet pulled me right in to the story. How long do I have to wait for this book? August 2025?
yes August 2025:(. All day the following day she wanted to swing by Mallory Square and see if Tobin was there.
DeleteI’ll bet she’ll always want to look for him
Deletewhen she comes for a visit!
DebRo
I think you're right!
DeleteI love it! It's those tiny details of reality that add authenticity to a story.
ReplyDeleteThe trick for me is not to load too much reality into the story and slow it down!
DeleteLucky Thea, getting to be in that performance and then your book! You are a very cool grandmother.
ReplyDeleteYou're very kind, I doubt they think I'm cool:)
DeleteI love thinking about your double life! The happy Roberta with her family enjoying the day, and writer Lucy, tucking it all away as a story. SO great!
ReplyDeletethanks Hank! I'm trying to imagine where you are. I looked at your schedule yesterday, but I still have no idea!
DeleteThat's a lovely memory for Thea to have. I enjoyed the snippet you wrote that weaves her into the story, and I love knowing the backstory of a scene like this. Does Thea know you've written her into the story, Lucy?
ReplyDeleteNot yet!
DeleteYa know, those Key West food critic mysteries just keep getting better and better! That Lucy Burdette is some writer! Love the snippet--you pull us right into the scene. I can feel the sun, smell the air, shift my feet there in the square as we wait for Tobin to respond. Great scene!!
ReplyDeleteThanks, you're very kind Flora!
DeleteGreat snippet! It's so exciting for Thea to be in your book. The little touches of reality make your stories so vivid.
ReplyDeletethanks Gillian
DeleteLUCY: Nice snippet! Great that you can add those authentic KW deals into your books.
ReplyDeletethanks Grace!
DeleteHow cute! Little details like this always give a sense of richness to the story.
ReplyDeletethanks Liz
DeleteThea Thea!!! That’s a memory she’ll long cherish! And what a great detail to go into your next book…
ReplyDeleteI think she will:)
DeleteI loved the video - Theo is adorable. It was great to see the crowd of people and Tobin.
ReplyDeleteSo many books come to mind that include real places, events and people, which I love because I can identify with the characters and the story. I've been to Key West on vacation and it's fun to recognize so many of the tourist places I've been to in your books Lucy.
I'm glad you're enjoying reliving your vacation!
DeleteYikes, spelled her name wrong - Thea!
ReplyDeleteHow fun for Thea! Both to be a part of Tobin’s act and to be in your book! I enjoy the real bits in the books I read. Sometimes I google things to see if they really exist.
ReplyDeleteI do the same Brenda!
DeleteWhat a lovely treat for Thea, who will always be, for a moment, a little girl in Mallory Square, thanks to her Grandmother! <3
ReplyDeleteHopefully that's not her only 15 minutes of fame:)
DeleteLove the video - an event Thea will remember her entire life! And I love that I will recognize it when I read the book and will know the backstory. An insider's tidbit. Nothing better.
ReplyDeleteThanks Kait, yes you guys are all insiders!
DeleteYes Kait that is so true
DeleteLucy, you make me want to visit Key West, every time I read any of your stories. It sounds like so much fun, murders aside. Thea is adorable, by the way.
ReplyDeletethanks Karen, and there really aren't that many murders here:)
Deletesorry I am late to the party, Lucy. Wonderful video! Love how you use a glimpse of real life in your Hayley story. Look forward to reading the novel.
ReplyDeleteDiana
thank you Diana!
DeleteLucy as I recall I think it is the Cuban Coffee Queen that Hayley visits regularly that was reviewed favorably by Guy Fieri?
ReplyDeleteI don't know about Guy--but we love the CCQ, as we affectionately call it. We have a cafe con leche from them almost every morning.
DeleteOh, I love this, Lucy! It's fun and perfectly sets the scene. I can't believe you're on book 15 - amazing! Side note: I desperately want to get back to the FL Keys. It's been too long.
ReplyDeleteThanks Jenn, come down!
DeleteDelightful, and she looks so happy! It reminds me of telling stories at Ren. Faire and getting volunteers to help. Once I overheard a little girl expressing disappointment at not getting to help at another show. I asked if she'd come back for mine, and her big grin when she sat down and I gave her a smile of greeting was delightful. When I called her up for the Fan story, it made our day! <3
ReplyDeleteNice teaser for your book . . . not that we need it, waiting with bated breath. ;-)
that's a wonderful memory Mary!
DeleteLove the scene from the story. I also have a granddaughter named Thea! I'm sure she'll remember the experience for a long time.
ReplyDeletecheers to your Thea! ours is Dorothea, after her grandmother.
DeleteLove the video, Lucy, that is so cute!! What a memory for Thea, and I love that you worked it into the book. And now I'm craving a cafe con leche from CCQ--wish I could beam myself to Key West!
ReplyDeleteYou're always welcome back Debs, after you've finished your book:)
DeleteOh, I wish we had been at Mallory Square that night. Most evenings we just walked to Truman Waterfront Park since it was so close to our rental in The Shipyard. Now we’re back in Pennsylvania where we don’t from day to day what season we’re in 🤪~Emily Dame
ReplyDeletespring is coming though Emily!
DeleteThea must have been thrilled! I hope I gave my granddaughter some adventures when she was younger that she'll always remember.
ReplyDeleteI bet you did Pat!
DeleteI love your books. Have taken a few on cruises so I can read them by the pool. Have you ever thought about adding the one day flights to Key West? My daughter and friends have flown to Key West on a Sat morning spent the day in Key West and flown home in late afternoon. They celebrate birthdays doing this from Sanford to Key West. Great way for a suspect to get away!
ReplyDeleteinteresting idea, thanks!
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